Great work! 9/10
The song by itself is really great and the melody is terrific! To make this song more "powerful" I would have added some basses (or deep strings etc.), but that's just a matter of taste. Unfortunately, the instruments used don't sound very realistic (I guess you used the default GM-Set). But after all, this submission deserves it's 9/10! Keep up the work... and maybe purchase Halion3 on eBay ;-)